posted April 19, 2000 09:11 PM
Hmm, I think parts of that are blank verse.Might want to paragraph it. How about this: -= Reprimand =- Many soldiers in the Vast Empire are given reprimands; For our great and glorious leader considers it a mere slap on the hand; There was once an officer, however, who considered these punishments neither trivial nor small; For he seemed to receive a multitude of them, I daresay he received them all; But tell me passing trooper, how you would have felt? For crimes which others had committed, the blame onto you would be severely dealt; What emotion would you feel? Anger? Bitterness or shame? For upon your cherished Imperial pride, this false reprimand had left its blatant stain. Perhaps you would try to redeem yourself, in front of all your High Council friends; But find your investigations to prove your innocence, would all come to a dead end. All of this I speak about, has truthfully happened to me; And if you remain in the Vast Empire, it will undoubtedly happen to thee. -= END =- hehe, three minutes to write that.
Note: A person already took offense to this post, so it is just a poem. If you do not like it, just disregard it and no it is not meant to affront anyone.
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